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原文：从压力-状态-响应框架模型入手，选取38个指标采用层次分析法和因子分析法相结合的方法对1990s以来中国环境状况进行了综合评价，结果表明：中国环境状况总体上趋于好转，经历了1990年-1997年的低水平徘徊、1997年-2003年的大幅提升、2003年-2005年的反弹这三个阶段；但是应当看到，在总体环境状况好转的同时，单纯的环境质量评价结果则表明中国的环境质量是在恶化的，只是这种恶化被环境建设、环境管理、污染控制等方面所取得的成效所平衡。今后，随着经济的快速增长，如果不能采取有效措施，环境质量将继续恶化，环境综合状况则可能延续2003年以后的反弹态势。


译文：Based on the pressure–state-response framework model, 38 indicators are abstracted in order to evaluate the environment conditions in China from 1990s. Then evaluation is carried out with the method of analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis. The result shows that the environment conditions are improving during the period on the whole although several undulations happened. It can be divided into three intervals: small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997, improving evidently during 1997-2003 and rebounding during 2003-2005. But the index of environment quality shows that the environment quality is deteriorating. At the same time, the index of environment construct, environment management and pollution control are improving. And the improving is much more efficient than the deteriorating, so the whole index is improving during the most time. In the future, with the high economic growth rate, the environment quality will be still deteriorating and environment conditions will also be rebounding if efficient actions are not carried out.

macauor

I am the first.

Based on the pressure–state-response framework model, 38 indicators are abstracted in order to evaluate the environment conditions in China from 1990s.

Based on the pressure-state-response framework model, 38 indicators are adopted in order to evaluate the environmental conditions in China since 1990s.

Then evaluation is carried out with the method of analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis.

The evaulation procedure is conducted by a combination of analytic hierarchy process method and factor analysis appoach.

The result shows that the environment conditions are improving during the period on the whole although several undulations happened.

Subsequently, the results indicate  that the conditions tend to get better as a whole.


It can be divided into three intervals: small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997, improving evidently during 1997-2003 and rebounding during 2003-2005.

The development can be divided into three successive stages: small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997;improving evidently during 1997-2003; and rebounding during 2003-2005.

But the index of environment quality shows that the environment quality is deteriorating. At the same time, the index of environment construct, environment management and pollution control are improving.

However, the index of environment quality shows that the environment quality is deteriorating as the indices of environment construct, environment management and pollution control are improving.

And the improving is much more efficient than the deteriorating, so the whole index is improving during the most time.

The main reason is that the improvements made by the above three measures overcome the negative effects.


In the future, with the high economic growth rate, the environment quality will be still deteriorating and environment conditions will also be rebounding if efficient actions are not carried out.

The economy will increase rapidly in the future. If no efficient actions are taken, the enironmental qualilty will be still deterorating and the phenomenon of rebounding will occur.

不当之处，请大家批评指正。

1. 选取38个指标采用层次分析法和因子分析法相结合的方法
38 indicators are abstracted in order to evaluate the environment conditions in China from 1990s. Then evaluation is carried out with the method of analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis.

所谓“层次分析法和因子分析法相结合的方法”是就“38个指标”而言。此句不可分开，分开意思就不对了。
38 indicators are chosed, with the method of ..., to evaluate ...
此外，38 indicators are abstracted in order to ... 若用"in order to"，则需置与句首。置于句子中，用不定式短语作主语补足语即可。

2. although several undulations happened  可考虑换成短语从句 in spite of several undulations
“低水平徘徊” 不等于 “ 低水平小规模波动” small undulation in lower level ，可以考虑
continuous deteriorate environment

3. 单纯的环境质量评价结果: the index of environment quality 可考虑 result of the sole
environment valuation

4. 中国的环境质量是在恶化的，只是这种恶化被环境建设、环境管理、污染控制等方面所取得的成效所平衡。
此句最好不要分译，否则句意就不连贯和准确了。可以考虑：...the environment quality is
deteriorating, which is balanced by the efforts of pollution control and the management and construct of environment.

5. 今后: In the future 从摘要内容看来，译成from now on 可能更准确些。

6. 如果不能采取有效措施，环境质量将继续恶化，环境综合状况则可能延续2003年以后的反弹态势。
the environment quality will be still deteriorating and environment conditions will also be rebounding if efficient actions are not carried out.
此句可否定前置，以示强调：had efficient measures are not been taken, the environment quality will ...

sedy

我的意见,不当之处,请多多指正

Based on the pressure–state-response framework model, 38 indicators are abstracted to evaluate the environment conditions in China from 1990s.Analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis are used to calculate the environment index. The result shows that the environment conditions are improving during the period by and large although several undulations happened. It can be divided into three intervals: small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997, notable improvment  during 1997-2003 and rebounding during 2003-2005. Although the index of environment quality shows that the environment quality is deteriorating, but at the same time the index of environment construct, environment management and pollution control are improving. The whole index is improving during the most time because the improving is much more efficient than the deteriorating. In the future, with the high economic growth rate, the environment quality will be still deteriorating and environment conditions will also be rebounding if efficient actions are not carried out in time.

cgjsccgj

Based on the pressure–state-response framework model, adopting 38 indicators this paper evaluated the environment conditions in China from 1990s.  with the method of analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis.

From the three intervals: small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997, improving evidently during 1997-2003 and rebounding during 2003-2005,it can find from the evaluation result that the environment conditions are improving.

But when the index of environment construct, environment management and pollution control are improving, the index of environment quality shows that the environment quality is deteriorating,and the deterioration is just balanced by the efficient result of environment building ,evironment managing  and pollute controlling.

So in the future, with the high economic growth rate, the environment quality will  deteriorate and environment conditions will also  rebound if efficient actions are not carried out .

yiqihouba

At the same time, the index of environment construct, environment management and pollution control are improving. And the improving is much more efficient than the deteriorating, so the whole index is improving during the most time.

这段话似乎更突出表达了环境建设、环境管理、污染控制等方面所取得的成效比恶化的程度更为明显，因而总体上是趋于上升的。

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谢谢大家。

sdlj2008

上次仓促,没改好,现补上,请赐教!
Based on the pressure–state-response framework model,environment conditions in China from 1990s are evaluated with 38 indicators abstracted.Then evaluation is carried out with the method of analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis. The result shows that the environment conditions are improving during the period on the whole although several undulations happened as follows: small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997, improving evidently during 1997-2003 and rebounding during 2003-2005.The index of single environment quality assessment shows that the environment quality is deteriorating,but the fact is remedied by  results of the environment construct, environment management and pollution control .In the future, with the high rate of economic growth , the environment quality will be still deteriorating and environment conditions will also be rebounding unless  efficient actions are  carried out.

zmllhw

理解思路：根据原文的意思、标点等理解，结果有2 个，其一是环境状况总体是趁于好的，其二环境质量是差的（前者的概念范围-状况要比单一的质量概念要广）。最后提出了忠告，即若不采取有效措施，二者均会变糟。据此翻译如下，请提出宝贵意见。
Based on the pressure-state-response framework model, the Chinese environment conditions from 1990s are evaluated comprehensively by choosing 38 indicators with the hierarchy analysis and factor analysis methods. The results show that: (1) the environment conditions tend towards better and they cover three stages, small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997, improving rapidly during 1997-2003 and rebounding during 2003-2005; (2) the onefold environment quality evaluation, however, shows that the Chinese environment quality is becoming deterioration, which is just inundated with the achievement of environment construction, environment management and pollution control. With the rapid development of economic, the environment quality will be deteriorating continually and the environment conditions will also be keeping the rebound state of the year 2003 if the effective measures are not been taken for the future.

caishine

Based on the pressure-state-response framework model, 38 indicators are taken on to evaluate the environmental conditions in China since 1990s. The evaluation method is conducted by a combination of analytic hierarchy process method and factor analysis approach. Then, the results point out that the conditions are improving during the period by and large although several undulations happened. There are three stages: The small wave in lower level during 1990-1997; getting better plainly during 1997-2003; and bouncing back during 2003-2005.Conversely, the index of environment quality shows that the environment quality is going down as the indices of environment construct, environment management and pollution control are enhancing. In the future, the economy will increase speedily. If there are no efficient actions are taken, the environmental quality will be still failing and the phenomenon of rebounding will occur.

sage888888

都是高手，我来学习学习！

andytsin

从压力-状态-响应框架模型入手，选取38个指标采用层次分析法和因子分析法相结合的方法对1990s以来中国环境状况进行了综合评价，
Based on the pressure–state-response framework model,38 indicators are adopted to make a comprehensive evaluation of Chinese environment since 1990s
结果表明：中国环境状况总体上趋于好转，经历了1990年-1997年的低水平徘徊、1997年-2003年的大幅提升、2003年-2005年的反弹这三个阶段；
The outcome shows that Chinese environment condition tends to better which experiencing 3 intervals:small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997,improving evidently during 1997-2003 and a rebound during 2003-2005.
但是应当看到，在总体环境状况好转的同时，单纯的环境质量评价结果则表明中国的环境质量是在恶化的，只是这种恶化被环境建设、环境管理、污染控制等方面所取得的成效所平衡。
Meanwhile the index of environment quality also indicates that the environment quality is deteriorating just because the deterioration is balanced by the efficient result of  environment construct, evironment management and pollution control.
今后，随着经济的快速增长，如果不能采取有效措施，环境质量将继续恶化，环境综合状况则可能延续2003年以后的反弹态势。
So in the future, with the high economic growth,the environment quality will deteriorate and environment conditions will also rebound if no efficient actions are taken .


个人观点，既然是abstract，应该在表达清楚的前提下，越简洁越好。仅供参考：）


费了半个小时琢磨修改的，版主，威望啊，我的威望；）

i_sfeng

Based on the pressure–state-response framework model, 38 indicators are abstracted in order to evaluate the environment conditions in China from 1990s. Then evaluation is carried out with the method of analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis.

Based on the model of pressure–state-response framework , 38 indicators are abstracted to evaluate the environment conditions in China from 1990s to now,which is carried out with the method of analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis.

The result shows that the environment conditions are improving during the period on the whole although several undulations happened.It can be divided into three intervals: small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997, improving evidently during 1997-2003 and rebounding during 2003-2005.

The result indicates that the environment conditions ,which go through the fluctuation of low level between 1990-1997,the obvious improvement between 1997-2003,and the rebounce between 2003-2005,were improved on the whole.

But the index of environment quality shows that the environment quality is deteriorating. At the same time, the index of environment construct, environment management and pollution control are improving. And the improving is much more efficient than the deteriorating, so the whole index is improving during the most time.

But the index of environment quality shows that it is deteriorating,the deterioration of the environment is only covered by the construction, environment management and pollution control's achievement.

In the future, with the high economic growth rate, the environment quality will be still deteriorating and environment conditions will also be rebounding if efficient actions are not carried out.

Following the economic quickly grow,in the future. the environment will be still deteriorating and the environment conditions will also rebound if no efficient actions be carried out.


                                                    第二和第三部分改动较大

neotsu

借用一楼。小n说事儿

Based on the pressure–state-response framework model, 38 indicators are abstracted in order to evaluate the environment conditions in China from 1990s.

Based on the pressure-state-response framework model, 38 indicators are adopted in order to evaluate the environmental conditions in China since 1990s.

>>>>>> 这里有两个问题，第一个是指标用什么好？indicator是指示器的意思。我觉得还是用参量来翻译比较好，比如，当兵用身高当指标。Parameter比较好？ 第二个问题是adopted....Abstracted..  Abstracted本身的意思是走神儿的。。Adopt我经常见到的多半是用在采用一个主意，采用一个方案等等。这种指标的采用，隐含的是若干个指标，选择出38各比较合适的来。。。所以直接用Selected 是最合适不过的了。


Then evaluation is carried out with the method of analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis.

The evaulation procedure is conducted by a combination of analytic hierarchy process method and factor analysis appoach.

>>>>>>对句子结构有些疑问。这么拆句是否很好？Based on....this paper evaluates....with hierarchy analysis and factor analysis of 38 selected parameters. 同时对 analytic hierarchy有疑问，是否专业词汇这么说？字面上似乎是分析的层次。

The result shows that the environment conditions are improving during the period on the whole although several undulations happened.

Subsequently, the results indicate that the conditions tend to get better as a whole.

>>>>>>The Result比较好了，不需要改。和以下的一句一起改成The Result Shows.. 1990-97, 97-2003, 2003-2005, 总体上是提高。。。比较好。Tend to不建议，因为实际情况就是越来越好，而不是趋向于越来越好。

It can be divided into three intervals: small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997, improving evidently during 1997-2003 and rebounding during 2003-2005.

The development can be divided into three successive stages: small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997;improving evidently during 1997-2003; and rebounding during 2003-2005.

>>>要用动名次最好都用。顺便，这里的徘徊我觉得是由停滞不前的意思，而并不是上下波动。stagnating

But the index of environment quality shows that the environment quality is deteriorating. At the same time, the index of environment construct, environment management and pollution control are improving.

However, the index of environment quality shows that the environment quality is deteriorating as the indices of environment construct, environment management and pollution control are improving.

>>>>>>这个But改得好，But, And正式文字不放句首。as改While比较好，暂且这些好了

wuaishu

看看这样译如何
From the pressure-state-response model of the framework.38 selected indicators level analysis and factor analysis method using the method since the 1990s for a comprehensive evaluation of the environmental situation in China.The results show that : the overall environmental situation has taken a turn for the better, experienced a low level of the year 1990 -1997 lingeringThe substantial expansion in 1997 and 2003, rebounded in 2003 and 2005 of three phases;However, it should be noted that while the overall environment improves.simply an environmental quality evaluation results show that China's environmental quality is deteriorating, but this was deteriorating environment.environmental management and pollution control as well as the results achieved in balance.In future, with the rapid economic growth, if not take effective measures, environmental quality will continue to deteriorate.Environmental conditions may extend beyond the 2003 Anti-Ballistic situation.and pollution control as well as the results achieved in balance.In future, with the rapid economic growth, if not take effective measures, environmental quality will continue to deteriorate.Environmental conditions may extend beyond the 2003 Anti-Ballistic situation.

ysm992511

Based on the pressure–state-response framework model, 38 indicators are abstracted in order to evaluate the environment conditions in China from 1990s. Then evaluation is carried out with the method of analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis.

Based on the pressure–state-response framework model, hierarchy process and factors analysis methods are adopted in order to synthetically evaluate the environment conditions in China since 1990s, which base on the 38 indicators.

The result shows that the environment conditions are improving during the period on the whole although several undulations happened. It can be divided into three intervals: small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997, improving evidently during 1997-2003 and rebounding during 2003-2005.

The result shows that the environment conditions are improving on the whole, though there are 3 fluctuations, which can be divided into three stage: low level during 1990-1997, evidently improving during 1997-2003, and rebounding during 2003-2005.

But the index of environment quality shows that the environment quality is deteriorating. At the same time, the index of environment construct, environment management and pollution control are improving. And the improving is much more efficient than the deteriorating, so the whole index is improving during the most time.

However the pure index of environment quality shows that the environment quality is deteriorating, and the over all environment are improved base on the environment construction, environment management and pollution control.


In the future, with the high economic growth rate, the environment quality will be still deteriorating and environment conditions will also be rebounding if efficient actions are not carried out.


In the future, with the high rate of economic growth, the environment quality and
integrate Environment will be keep on deteriorating rebounding after 2003, if lack of effective actions.

  

yct01

Based on the model of pressure–state-response framework , 38 indexes are adopted to evaluate the environment conditions in China from 1990s to now,by analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis .That Chinese environment condition tends to better which experiencing 3 intervals:small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997,improving evidently during 1997-2003 and a rebound during 2003-2005.But the index of environment quality shows that it is deteriorating,the deterioration of the environment is only concealed by the construction, environment management and pollution control's achievement. With the economy quickly growing,in the future. the environment will continue deteriorate and the environment conditions will also rebound as 2003’s if no effective actions be carried out.

haoduo5658

原文：从压力-状态-响应框架模型入手，选取38个指标采用层次分析法和因子分析法相结合的方法对1990s以来中国环境状况进行了综合评价，结果表明：中国环境状况总体上趋于好转，经历了1990年-1997年的低水平徘徊、1997年-2003年的大幅提升、2003年-2005年的反弹这三个阶段; 此句的顺序应该是“经历了...中国环境状况总体上趋于好转”。但是应当看到，在总体环境状况好转的同时，单纯的环境质量评价结果则表明中国的环境质量是在恶化的，只是这种恶化被环境建设、环境管理、污染控制等方面所取得的成效所平衡。此句翻译不恰当，因为翻译的句子之间的关系美表现出来。没今后，随着经济的快速增长，如果不能采取有效措施，环境质量将继续恶化，环境综合状况则可能延续2003年以后的反弹态势。
译文：Based on the pressure–state-response framework model, 38 indicators are abstracted in order to evaluate the environment conditions in China from 1990s. Then evaluation is carried out with the method of analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis. 此句的主要部分是“综合评价”而你翻译的却是“38个指标”Based on the pressure–state-response framework model, China's environment conditions from 1990s were comprehensively evaluated in terms of 38 selected factors using the method of analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis. 因为翻译科技英语时你的句子可以采用多个从句或者非谓语动词，没有必要把一个长句子打开分为几个短句子。The result shows that China's environment conditions are improving during the period on the whole although several undulations happened. It 指代不明can be divided into three intervals: small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997, improving evidently during 1997-2003 and rebounding during 2003-2005. The results shows that after three phases of lower level progress during 1990-1997, drastic improvement during 1997-2003 and the rebound during 2003年-2005, China's environment conditions have a tendency to be improved on the whole. But  the index of environment quality shows that the environment quality is deteriorating. At the same time, the index of environment construct, environment management and pollution control are improving. And the improving is much more efficient than the deteriorating, so the whole index is improving during the most time. However, we need to realize that although the overall environment conditions have been improved, the evaluation results of the environment quality indicate China's environment quality is deteriorating; and the deterioration is balanced by the effects of the environment construction, environment management and pollution control. In the future, 不是“未来”而是“从今以后”with the high economic growth rate,要翻译的是“经济的快速增长”而不是“经济的增长速度加快”所以不恰当 the environment quality will be still 不恰当deteriorating and environment conditions will also be rebounding if efficient actions are not carried out.没今后，随着经济的快速增长，如果不能采取有效措施，环境质量将继续恶化，环境综合状况则可能延续2003年以后的反弹态势。From now on, with the fast econonic development, China's environment quality would continue to deteriorate and its overall conditions would follow the rebounding tendency from 2003 if we didn't take some effective measures.此处用这种虚拟语气比较好。

tycoon

1. 38 indicators are abstracted in order to evaluate the environment conditions in China from 1990s
这是非常低的汉语句子的直译，不可取。应为：
  This paper conducts a comprehensive evaluation of environmental conditions in China since 1990 based on the analysis of 38 factors through hierarchy process and factor analysis.

2. The result shows that the environment conditions are improving during the period on the whole although several undulations happened. It can be divided into three intervals: small undulation in lower level during 1990-1997, improving evidently during 1997-2003 and rebounding during 2003-2005.
这样安排句子是明显错误的。在英语中，重要的新信息应安排句末（end weight)。所以应改为：
Although three stages of changes, namely,  stagnant during 1990-1997, improving evidently during 1997-2003 and rebounding during 2003-2005,  the result shows that the environment conditions on the whole are improving during the period.

3. the environment  is deteriorating.

4. 只是这种恶化被环境建设、环境管理、污染控制等方面所取得的成效所平衡
the deterioration is counteracted by the effects of the environment construction, environment management and pollution control.

sunzhenhui

Based on the pressure–state-response framework model,The environmental status in China since 1990s were evaluated comprehensively by the method of analytic hierarchy process and factor analysis, which includes 38 parameters.

The results indicate that the environmental conditions in China are improving generally during the period. And the whole changing period can be divided into three intervals: wandering in lower level during 1990-1997, improving evidently during 1997-2003 and rebounding during 2003-2005.

As the generally circumstance quality changing better, we have to realize and admit that the pure enviromental quality evaluation results showed that environmental conditions in China are deteriorating in fact. But the deteriorating is impaired by the success of environment construct, environment management and pollution control.

With the economy growing quickly, the environment will continue to deteriorate From now on, and perhaps the environment conditions will rebound as 2003’s if no effective measures were carried out.